Hello everyone,

I just published my new website, http://www.optimoffice.fr/en/

Please review and tell me what you think.

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Sylvie Guiziou
Optim Office

Hi Sylvie,

I really like the look of your site and the name!

But here are some things I noticed:

1. I found typos on almost every page, with some pages having three or four.

2. I really would reword this on your home page because it makes it sound like the work you would be doing for them is not important: "4 essential reasons for outsourcing an activity to Optim Office which is not an integral part of your job." Basically you're saying let Optim do things for a business that are not an essential (inegral) part of that business. In your great SlideShare thing, one of the slides said that a VA can help with things that are an essential part of the business that don't make sense for them to do. Or maybe don't really have time to do because they're so busy doing client work. That's the key!

3. The wording of the first checked statement on the home page sounds a bit awkward.

4. I love what you're trying to say with this sentence on your About page, but for some reason the way it's said sounds a bit awkward: "It's not because you can do everything that you have to do everything!" Maybe something like, "Just because you can do everything doesn't mean you have to do everything!"

Your SlideShare thing is great!!

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Pam Deyerle - Transcriptionist in Richmond, Virginia (16 years)
The Perfect Word Transcription Service

Pam has done a great job of offering some feedback. It appears you may have already made a couple of changes...or I am just seeing some things that are different from what Pam lists.

I do love the layout, colors and the types of font you are using. Very clean and professional. I get a great "feel" from it - which is huge to give your visitors.

However, like Pam I'm picking up on some grammar things as well, that make certain phrasing a bit awkward.

-Under your logo - You say - Help you refocus... - Perhaps better wording would be "helping."

-I love the heading..."Benefit from our expertise..." - However, people do come from a place of emotion and feeling when making a decision on how to spend their money. "Carrying out" doesn't give me any warm fuzzies. It makes me feel you will just simply be doing a job rather than saying something like "caring for" which make me feel you will care about what is on my plate.

-Also, when you say you will help me expand my activity...I think - "more work, more activity, is the last thing I need." Maybe something more that addresses allowing them to work on their vision, the things that matter to them. Again...think of that emotional connection.

- I think the wording of the second bullet on the homepage also sounds awkward. You may just need to have someone do an editing job for you. Trust me, this is not a slam. The absolute best writers know that because they are too close to their work they need editors and proofreaders.

- There are also some issues with proper capitalization of first letter. For instance, in your navigation bar...About us and Your needs - the second word is not first letter capped, but Our Collaboration is...which for titles would be proper. Same in Audio and video Transcription. Video needs to be first letter cap also.

Hope this is of some help. I really love the ideas you are presenting and the flow of the site. Also love the classy use of imagery. One other thing to consider, perhaps, is to get a picture of you on the site on the about page. Because we are virtual it is very hard for someone to want to do business with someone they don't know. When we at least have a "quality" image (not a candid photo taken from our cell phone in our car or in front of our mirror) they at least feel some bit of familiarity with us.

Overall - great start.

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Pam Blackman - On My Wings International
Integrated Virtual Business Management Solutions | Mentoring | Coaching

Hi,
Thank you so much for your feedback and your encouragement.
I will need a few days to make the suggested improvements but I will do them.
Thanks again.
Sylvie

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Sylvie Guiziou
Optim Office

I really enjoyed looking at your site. It is a job well done. Just a few things:

1. You may want to run a spell and grammar check (or have someone else check it for you)--sometimes another pair of eyes can see things we cannot.
2. In the quote box there is no ending quote mark so it is difficult to tell where the quote ends or if there is more than one--great quotes by the way.
3. I would take out some of the unnecessary words on your contact page--sometimes less is best.
Overall you did a wonderful job and I look forward to seeing your great success stories.

Wen

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http://www.anofcextension.com
EHR implementation/support, Computer software training, Medical Billing and Coding

I think you've got some great feedback so I won't add to it except to say I think your site is beautiful, and it really does have a great feeling to it. Very classy, very beautiful, very clean and professional! Best of luck!

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