Let me go and look at it some more. I agree with what others say, so I will focus on more formatting. The others are more seasoned with regards to marketing a VA. : )

Lesley Jon Ramos
Portland, OR, USA

Let me go and look at it some more. I agree with what others say, so I will focus on more formatting. The others are more seasoned with regards to marketing a VA. : )

Lesley Jon Ramos
Portland, OR, USA

UPPERCASE WORDS ARE ONES I ADDED.
Lowercase words are what you had on the site.
Don't use 'all CAPS' on the site -- its just a way to see 'mine' and 'yours'. : )

Lesley


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ok,
thanks for the input, il bear in mind all that you have suggested.
thank you

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Karen,

I liked your site. I liked the uncluttered look.

One thing I noticed. In your very first statement you said We are.... Why don't you change that to say First Class Office Assistance is.... This will show up better on site searches. Use the name of your company more in the text for SEO reasons.

Good luck in your start-up. Keep us posted on how things are going.

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Hi

You're getting there! Excellent advice offered already.

I agree on the center alignment. It felt more like a flyer to me then a website.

Also, with the pictures. I like them, they're cute, but could you go more off of the name of your business. First Class ... Make it feel more professional and top of the line. You have an awesome business name so maybe try and work that in more.

Good luck!

Thanks for all the advice.
I have done so much editing now and changed it so many times that I think im going to leave it alone now.
I do very much apreciate all the help and advice that eveyone one has given me and I have learnt so much.
Thank you again to everyone that helped.

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Karen ~ Nice colors and images for your page. I would like to mention that you need to punctuate your sentences. Some have puctuation and some don't. Even here your first lines.
Do you run a business?
If so you could benefit from our virtual services

It's know it's hard to proof yourself.

One last comment, I like your home page, but If it were me, I would move those graphic somewhere else in the middle. I'm not feeling it flows. What I mean is that the first couple sentences are left margin, then the next two lines are centered, then the next line is indented because of the graphic - if it were me, I would take out the printer and the telephone graphic and then either center the sentences or move them all to the left margin.

Definately change this! You are giving away two hours of your time.....who will want to sign up for the next hour half price? If it were me I would think, "Hey, I can get two hours of free labor for no other reason". You might want to say something like, purchase one hour and receive one hour free (or two hours if you want), but at least you're getting money first!

Order 2 hours FREE service
If you like what you get then get the next hour
Half price when booking a further
2 consecutive hours.

Keep up the good work! It's getting there.

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