Hey y'all,

I've been working on my homepage content. Could I get a bit of feedback on the direction and content I have headed with this, please?

I still have tons to do, but I would appreciate your input/insights as to what I am trying to get across is coming across as cohesive, understandable, and maybe even relatable (<-is that a word? ).

I hope this makes sense what I'm asking. I'm cross-eyed!

Thanks a bunch! (Link to my site is under my signature.)

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Jules, SunRise Virtual Solutions - WordPress Customization & XHTML/CSS Web Sites

Jules,

I get it but you may want to move your services to a separate page so as not to distract from your original message.

Also you may want to give a little blurb or intro to your becoming a VA quotes. They are just random in there otherwise.

I do like your message so far and the fact that you explain why VA is for you.

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Lee Drozak
My Office Assistant

I agree with Lee, you may want to move your services to a separate page but link to your services from your homepage as well. Something like "take a look at my services for more information" with a link. You also might want to add some bullet points in your homepage and shorten some sentences. Also, I like the quote but you might want to move it from the dead center of your page to the sidebar and maybe even include a photo of you on the homepage. Also if you are part of Twitter and other social networking groups, place them in a more prominent position with the logo.

I hope this helped

Caroline
http://cpstyle.ca

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Caroline Pigott
VIP Assistant Solutions

Jules --

Hello from a fellow Iowa native. Did you create your web site in Wordpress?

May I add you to my contacts?

Judy

Hi Jules,

First of all, I love your site design...very nice!

Your copy is off to a great start too. A few suggestions:

• Get rid of the "Welcome" line and lead with a compelling headline to cause readers to keep reading
• I would save your comments in the box for the About page and use that space for a glowing testimonial from a client or former employer
• I personally don't see anything wrong with listing a few main service offerings on your home page, but I would focus more on the benefits offered by each service (ie. save time with our admin tasks, save money with our proficient bookkeeping services, etc. etc.)

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Tammi Metzler ~ The Write Associate
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Originally Posted by leedrozak

Jules, I get it but you may want to move your services to a separate page so as not to distract from your original message. Also you may want to give a little blurb or intro to your becoming a VA quotes. They are just random in there otherwise. I do like your message so far and the fact that you explain why VA is for you.

Hi Lee,

With the list of services, that is just a short list of what I can do. I get what you are saying, and I was trying to not distract from the rest (didn't bold that area ). Hmmm...I will do some more thinking on this. Maybe shorter with a link...

Great idea about a blurb! I was trying to tie that part about assisting an existing in-house assistant by giving my experience. Or maybe I'm misunderstanding what you mean?

Thank you!!

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Jules, SunRise Virtual Solutions - WordPress Customization & XHTML/CSS Web Sites

Originally Posted by CarolineCloutie

I agree with Lee, you may want to move your services to a separate page but link to your services from your homepage as well. Something like "take a look at my services for more information" with a link. You also might want to add some bullet points in your homepage and shorten some sentences. Also, I like the quote but you might want to move it from the dead center of your page to the sidebar and maybe even include a photo of you on the homepage. Also if you are part of Twitter and other social networking groups, place them in a more prominent position with the logo. I hope this helped Caroline http://cpstyle.ca

Hi Caroline,

Yup, my services will be listed on a separate page in greater detail. And linking to my services page I completely didn't think about. Given what Lee said, I will try to "shorten" what I said there, and also shorten what I said elsewhere, too. It was getting late, and I could have gone on and on and written a book!

I kind of wanted the blockquote to be under the previous paragraph to give a little personal information... Not good?

Bullet points. Gotcha!

Oh yes, I'll be adding twitter, RSS, and other things.

You did indeed help! Thank you!!

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Jules, SunRise Virtual Solutions - WordPress Customization & XHTML/CSS Web Sites

Originally Posted by A_Virtual_Jewel

Jules -- Hello from a fellow Iowa native. Did you create your web site in Wordpress? May I add you to my contacts? Judy

Hello, Judy - always nice to meet someone my home state!

Yes, I had messed around with Wordpress in the past, so when it came time to do my new VA site (and the fact that I wanted a blog area) I decided to give it a go. I'm pretty pleased that I haven't had too much trouble customizing it for my uses (knowing HTML/CSS/php has helped a lot). Whew!!

Sure, you can add me as a contact.

Have fun here; you're going to love it!!

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Jules, SunRise Virtual Solutions - WordPress Customization & XHTML/CSS Web Sites

Originally Posted by Write Associate

Hi Jules, First of all, I love your site design...very nice! Your copy is off to a great start too. A few suggestions: Get rid of the "Welcome" line and lead with a compelling headline to cause readers to keep reading I would save your comments in the box for the About page and use that space for a glowing testimonial from a client or former employer I personally don't see anything wrong with listing a few main service offerings on your home page, but I would focus more on the benefits offered by each service (ie. save time with our admin tasks, save money with our proficient bookkeeping services, etc. etc.)

Hey Tammi, great idea to ditch the "Welcome" - now I need to come up with something "compelling."

Okay, so y'all don't care for my little blockquote there. Dang. I was trying to relate to the paragraph above it and my angst with my previous J.O.B. and wishing I had known about VAs back then. I'll do some thinking on this.

Great idea about the benefits! Then I could add a link to the services page from there! Super!!

Aw, so glad you like my site! It means a lot to hear this!

Okay, off to implement all the great input from y'all!!

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Jules, SunRise Virtual Solutions - WordPress Customization & XHTML/CSS Web Sites

Your website looks just great, Jules! Good work!

I was surprised, BTW, to read the other day some in-depth advice about SEO writing, and they recommended going ahead and putting specific products (in this case, services) on the home page. Not all of them, just a sampling. The idea is that someone searching for (e.g.) payroll services might find you because it's on your index page.

Also, SEO would dictate that you make sure your headlines and titles contain your keywords.

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Mary H. Ruth/Virtual Writing & Communications
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