I submitted to 3 different free submission sites yesterday. One emailed me this morning to say it was accepted.
I'm very proud of it although I'm sure there are a few adjustments I could make. I appreciate any and all critiques.

Press Release 11-20


Thanks,
Christina
Vital Office Solutions

How exciting it must be to see your words in print. Good job Christina!

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Shari Sultana
Online Business Manager (marketing for retail ecommerce)

Hi Christina Bravo on your first release - I have a very small amount of feedback but will copy and paste the release here for easier communique

PRLog.Org) – Nov 20, 2007 – Virtual Assistants are business owners, just like you, which means VAs understand the importance of running and maintaining a business. Virtual Assistants work from their own offices, using their own equipment, to provide services to businesses and individuals. Communication is made via through e-mail, phone, fax, or postal mail.
“Building a business is a continual process which can be very stressful. When you are able to delegate those "must-do" tasks to someone else, you can relax and spend more time focusing on growing your business or even steal away some "me" time.”
(If this is a quote it would be good to let the reader know who said it... EX - says Christina Nelson, virtual assistant and owner of Vital Office Solutions.)

What can Vital Office Solutions do for you?
Vital Office Solutions assists you in maintaining a more efficient office, allowing you the time and energy to get back to the reason you went into business.
Your passion!
With over 10 years of administrative and bookkeeping experience, Vital Office Solutions can assist with proofing, editing and typing all of your correspondence, handle all of your bookkeeping, accounts receivable and accounts payable as well as debt collection, take (space) over your event planning and even provide help in preparing for those yearly WC & GL Insurance audits so you can worry about (negative - use a word like 'focus on' etc.) the important job of running your business.
Partnering with Vital Office Solutions will provide you with more free time to spend with your clients and less time behind your desk. To find out more about what Vital Office Solutions can do for you please visit http://www.vitalofficesolutions.com.
Vital Office Solutions looks forward to providing professional, accurate and timely service to your company and building a wonderful partnership with you.
For additional information, contact:
Christina Nelson, Owner
Vital Office Solutions
http://www.vitalofficesolutions.com
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About Vital Office Solutions:
I am Christina Nelson, Business Owner, Virtual Assistant, Homeowner, Mother of 4, Wife of 1 (not sure about this one...I know you want to provide some of your own whimsy and sense of humor, which is great, but this feels kind of 'off' to me, perhaps 'married mother of 4'? Also no need for CAPS) and a multitude of other things. (too vague)
I specialize in providing the essential and integral elements of virtual office administration, handling everything from data entry projects to accounts payable and accounts receivable. From calendar and e-mail account management to faxing and mailings.
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Thanks for the input Tess. I completely blanked on the quoted text, my 17 year old caught it though (after the fact) LOL.
I see what you mean about the wording in those sections. I have a list of other submission sites to go through so I'll be able to change it and submit to them.

Thanks Again,
Christina

Looks great! Good Job!

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Lily Chambers, The Virtual Office Goddess, LLC
Author "How to Do Your Own Small Business Bookkeeping"

Thanks Lily.

I appreciate it when someone takes the time to leave a quick note of encouragement.

Happy Thanksgiving.
Christina

Great job. I am inspired to do one for my business. Wonderful job.

Very well written Kudos to you!

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Dawn Riley
A Virtual Assistant in Paradise
Our business is about making yours better

Nice job for your first time.

Good job,

I'm sure you will receive a boost in visitors to your site, and will be able to convert them to clients. Remember to post press releases whenever you have news to share -- as by doing so will help spread the word about your business and add a higher level of credibility to your company and its offerings.

Good luck!

Christina I thought that your press release was exceptional! You did a wonderuful job of letting prospective clients know what you can do for them and informing them of the benefits of doing business with you. Wonderful job of staying on task!

I am also inspired to do a press release as well for mine. Thanks and great job!

Hi Christina,

Thanks for sharing your press release, I am starting to write one for the launch of my new business too, so it's very inspiring to read that others are getting theirs accepted and 'out there'. It's a great introduction to what you offer and who you are. I like how you've positioned yourself as a partner to their business - I think that is very important -like you are becoming a part of their business, not just a random temp. It promotes integrity and consistency.
Awesome!
Thanks again Christina
Jacqui

Congrats, keep up the good work and never ever quit. The Law of attraction states what you put in comes back multiplied...

Sandra

Good job!

Kerri-Ann