Release written for me by my daughter. What do you all think. I will forward your comments to her.

Hi Vicky,
It's really nice that your daughter is authoring your press for you, but the release seems to be less of an actual press release and more like an article, review or blog post.

As it's already out I won't trouble you with too much on the spelling and grammar, but in the first line you've got: I recently came across and interesting idea on the Internet: a virtual office

But I expect you'd want it to read '...an interesting idea...' (there are a few 'and's where you must have meant 'an' throughout the release body.

For more info and tutorials on press release writing you can check this thread from our archives.

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Thank you, I did not even read through it. Guess that goes without saying that you should even check your family's input. :}

Yes, definitely worth a second set of eyes, or even a third - especially considering that it is a direct reflection of your business.

As brilliant as our family members may be, it's still up to each of us to ensure that any copy that goes out with our company name attached is up to par.

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I'm wondering if its possible to go into your PRLog account and make changes from there.

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www.aivirtualsolutions.com

You have to have them edit it but I sent a note so hopefully they will soon. Even when you are busy, this will teach you to pay better attention. I have been upgrading my website for a couple of days. Thank you all for the help and input.:aureola:

Its a good article. I was thinking of having my daughter help with me with some writing. She is definitely the writer in my family. Tell your daughter good job Vicky...how old is she?

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Deb Frawley
Gem's Virtual Office

I do agree with you Deb that it's a nice article

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Very nice article. Your daughter has some writing talent!

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Dawn Riley
A Virtual Assistant in Paradise
Our business is about making yours better

Thank you ladies. She is 20 and will turn 21 new years eve. her and I are going to Vegas for a week. I made a promise to her 16 years ago when we lived there that I would take her back for her 21st. :}