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Old 09-26-2007
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Rebecka, I love it! It tells me volumes more about you and in a very conversational way - hurrah for personality!!

Just a few suggestions:
"Even if you are not technologically advanced, you can work with a virtual assistant. Trust me, old dogs can learn new tricks... no one says they have to be fancy!"

I'm not clear on the 'fancy' part and the dog reference may turn some people off...
Maybe instead of this it could be something like:
"You don't have to be technologically advanced to work seamlessly with a virtual assistant. My experience in both the corporate and virtual worlds means you get the best of both, and can rely on me to help you make an easy transition from in-office assistance to virtual assistance."

"Its fun to take a big mess and re-work it into something organized and functional and it's rewarding to see the end result."
Maybe another word for 'big mess'? Maybe,
"I can take the very thing you've avoided doing because it's too big, too messy, too frustrating and rework it into something...."

I might also lengthen the sentence "I provide a conventional service in an unconventional way" so it continues on with a list of your certifications - as they're a bit farther down the page you don't want people to miss that part.
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