I agree with all the suggestions mentioned. I like that your personality comes out as well but you may want to avoid becoming to informal in such a professional industry.

Then I had 2 other notes:
1.)"Your Virtual Legal Assistant works WITH solo attorneys and small firms to make work run smoother. We make routine processes actually routine and manage client contact. If you don’t have clients we can assist you with that process too. " I would remove "actually" from this sentence as well.
2.) "Congratulations, today is your lucky day…you’ve discovered Your Virtual Legal Assistant and your life (well at least the attorney part) is about to get easier. " I just had a difficult time reading this sentence. Since it is the first sentence it may need to be reworded. The first thing I comprehend in compressed mode is this "you've discovered your virtual assistant and your life." It is my personal opinion only, but I try not to use parenthesis in a sentence that is too important because it can really break a sentence and a thought. This is a good example of that. "Today is your lucky day" is also a cliche which I was instructed, never to use in good writing. Since you are trying to have a more conversational tone, this may have been your intention. Anyway, I hope that was atleast moderately helpful.

You have a great start.... good luck.

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