Hi Tess,
Wow, thanks for the suggestions. I haven't had chance to re-read the release since I wrote it, until now. It always amazes me the transgression writing goes through from beginning to end (at least for me). It is amazing how a few words deleted or added changes the entire flow of the piece.
I am taking English Comp. II this semester at college, so hopefully by May my writing skills will improve! I may perhaps, then take Creative Writing during the summer semester. I love to write, but unfortunately I take forever to become inspired.
I will conquer the release later on and indeed utilize the suggestions. Have a good Saturday!
Darlene